Masterplan - final pin-up for assessment, 24.01.11

Here is the revised version - taking into consideration as much as I could the comments from last week.
Monday's feedback still reveals plenty of issues to resolve - notably my section trees are still too stylised, plan annotation too bold and too much of it. Repeating things in the key graphics again on the plan, line hierarchy - design issues in the southern section... more colour variation in trees on the plan...and yet less colour on the plan! Julia still doesn't think much of my pool and beach....

I was pleased with my mark - but had better get on with the masterplan document, otherwise....

Masterplan - first pass 17.01.11- Sterile and lurid

Here is my first attempt at my masterplan, sections and perspectives for Calverley Grounds.
I thought originally that we were being assessed on this pin-up - but we were given a crit instead.

Feedback received from tutors - plan - too lurid, trees too stylised, over-designed, crowded composition, sections - promising, perspectives sterile and poor composition on page... need I go any further....

my people look like pigeons with feet dipped in acid and Julia doesn't think much of my natural swimming pool and beach...


ouch!

I'm too busy...

these are the words most on my lips these days... my husband tells everyone I'm busier than David Cameron, no Obama even. My friends have given up on me, the dog opens its own tin of food and my poor old Dad is still confused as to why I gave up a reasonably good job to do gardening....

I must admit at various stages over the past few weeks I have looked up from my crayoning, whilst most sane people are tucked up in bed and wondered why I embarked upon this in the first place. It's a reasonable thought... most people I spoke to on Monday after our assessment said much the same thing.
But of course I know why I want to do this, and that keeps me going and hopefully will keep my going long after the final final crit.

But I must find quicker ways to get things done - before I develop pencil elbow. Anyway, I am already getting more efficient, because last night I was dreaming about different paint effects I should try for my trees.

So what are the next steps on the masterplan? We're zooming in to 1:200 scale - oh and the small task of the survey document to attend to. Plus some other assignments and a trip to Lille... best stop blathering on here then and get on with it....

And for some visual interest here is my masterplan for Calverley Grounds...or should I say Park Creative.... helps if you say it in a French accent...by the way the frame is not part of the design, but indicates the area chosen for the 1:200 treatment.

I'll post a scan of the whole design, sans frame, tomorrow - when I get them back from the printers....

the 1:200 area I chose...

...and what Jamie chose