Masterplan - first pass 17.01.11- Sterile and lurid

Here is my first attempt at my masterplan, sections and perspectives for Calverley Grounds.
I thought originally that we were being assessed on this pin-up - but we were given a crit instead.

Feedback received from tutors - plan - too lurid, trees too stylised, over-designed, crowded composition, sections - promising, perspectives sterile and poor composition on page... need I go any further....

my people look like pigeons with feet dipped in acid and Julia doesn't think much of my natural swimming pool and beach...


ouch!